This poem is a formal structure known as a triolet. It has a specific rhyme scheme and some of the lines are repeated. It is a bargain for the poet, because you only have to write five lines and you have an eight-line poem. This one was written in memory of my sister and is included in my chapbook of grief poems-"I Keep You with Me" (See February 19 post).
Sun Struck
The brightness of the sun
hurts my eyes and my heart.
I am completely undone
by the brightness of the sun.
It highlights the loss of one
who has been there from the start.
The brightness of the sun
hurts my eyes and my heart.
I'm sorry for the loss of your sister but thank you for sharing your poem. TALU
ReplyDeleteThanks, Nancy. TALU
DeleteVery nice :-) ~TALU~
ReplyDeleteThank you, Kathy. I do like working with this form. TALU
DeleteAs sad as the meaning, it's lovely that you can still include her in your writing.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Chris. It really helps.
DeleteThat's nice Michelle. Have you ever done readings?
ReplyDeleteI have, Kenya. I have read this a couple of times. Each time, someone has approached me afterwards to talk more about the form.
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